Promises

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Author: neyah444
Title: Promises
Rating: PG
Pairing/s: Merlin/Arthur
Character/s: Merlin, Arthur
Summary: Promises they cannot keep
Warnings: unbeta'd
Word Count: 100
Prompt: #3: scars
Author's notes: Thank you for all the lovely comments on 'Flames', I hope you'll also like this one. I didn’t want to post this, because I don’t like it personally, but I thought what the hell. The style I used here is totally strange for me, never used it before, I can only hope I could make it work. I can't say I'm totally satisfied with it, but here it goes.

Promises

’I’m happy to be your servant, till the day I die.’ Tied by fate.

„…for the crime of betrayal…” Arthur’s voice booms across the courtyard.

You deceived me for as long as I have known you!

Banishment.

„…leave and never return to Camelot on the penalty of death.”

His lips ghosting Arthur’s chest drawing a soft moan. Bound by love. Forever.

His eyes told everything: ’I don’t ever want to see you again.’

Merlin’s nails dig deep enough to draw blood, he’s sure it’ll leave a scar, cutting deep into the life line of his palm. Destiny written in scars.

Comments

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

Oooh, that gave me the chills. It's very powerful. See what you can with 100 words? Well done! I especially love that last line because it's such a play on "destiny written in the stars".

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Thank you, hon! I was so nervous about this one, but I'm relieved that you loved it. 100 words can be a lot sometimes. Yeah, it was a play with words at the end, because I thought it'd fit. :-*

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

The drabble format is almost more like poetry at times. You have to abbreviate and concentrate the language.

It definitely works for me!

I think you will find that some drabbles "sing" brighter than others, but it's definitely been a good way for me to focus intensely on something.

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

I can feel the poetry in it that's why I love them. But sometimes there are so many things inside me I just can't express. I guess it's just harder because my English is not that good. It'll probably get better with writing (and reading all the wonderful stuff here). That's why I started.

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

Right. Well, drabbles are not for telling long complicated stories. You can certainly tell a type of story in a drabble, but it's not going to be long.

Yes, I love the poetry in drabbles too.

I think you write very well, especially considering that English is not your first language!

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Thanks:)
Drabbles for me are more like just a thought or a feeling, not really a story. That was why this was a bit different than usual, cause a bit of 'story' got poured in it.

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

I think you'll find that happens from time to time. My "scar" drabble has a lot more story in it than most of my drabbles.

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

I only did that with my drabble series so far, which was one story with chapters of 100 words. You're scar drabble was amazing. But I already told you that:) That comparison was fantastic.

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

Thanks, again:) I love playing with the drabble form. I have written over 30 at this point. Not sure of the exact number. I enjoy playing with the different effects you can get though.

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

I would love to read all of them:) I just started to write drabbles 3 weeks ago, so there's not many. I wrote a 20 piece series, and 5 standalones so far, including the two for this prompt, but planning on writing more.

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

You can find all my fic on AO3:) Knock yourself out. Where is your fic?

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

On ffnet, under the same username. Strange that I've never heard about AO3 before, but I found you. Wow, you have many fanfics:) I'll find time to read them all. Promise. I'm intrigued. Thanks.

[jelazakazone.livejournal.com]

Excellent. I'll check them out.

*blush* Really, you do not need to read them all. I am actually planning to do a post tomorrow (most likely) on my favorite fics that I've written. Start with the ones with a high kudo count, if you are really aiming to read everything:D

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Well, you should know something about me. *leans closer* I'm a reading addict, I can't help it. So yeah, I'm really planning to read them all.:) Just watch me! *insert wicked grin*

[fuckyeah.livejournal.com]

Gah, there's so much power here in such a short piece! I love it!

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to comment!:)

[waltzing-mice.livejournal.com]

:(

But thank you!

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

I know it's a sad one. But in my mind there are always hope for those two. :) Thanks for commenting.

[hogwartsvixxxen.livejournal.com]

♥ WOW! such emotion in so few words and not to sound redunant but I loved the way it flowed
♥ This was so heartbreaking.
♥ I'm so glad you posted this.

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Reading your lovely words made me glad I did.:D Thanks! ♥

[hogwartsvixxxen.livejournal.com]

♥ :) *hugs*

[yenny2206.livejournal.com]

No that is too sad!!! Poor Merlin.

Well writen but now I want something happy :D

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Thanks very much for the comment. Unfortunately lately I'm not really in the mood to write happy, but despite the angsty prompt there are some lighthearted drabbles by other:)

[archaeologist-d.livejournal.com]

I liked how the story was told in so few words. Loved the idea of the scars. Great job.

[neyah444.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much. It makes me happy you enjoyed it.:)